Compared to my first essay, I have been able to make a lot more global revisions that has improved my writing. For the first essay, my global revisions mainly consisted of fixing my thesis and having a more deep explaination of my quotes and being precise as to why I chose them. When it came to this essay, however, I feel like there were other areas in need of focus because I did well on those other aspect. For this essay, I made sure my thesis was very clear as to what I was trying to say because I know this has been a struggle of mine in the past. I also made sure that I was specific in my paragraphs when explaining the quotes and how they relate to my thesis. The things that I need to change in this essay mainly focus on seeing if there are places where I can add in texts from different authors. When writing my first draft, I made sure I had at least one author in each paragraph and I even tried to compare their writing to other authors writings. However, I feel like I can even add more examples to strengthen the piece of writing. I know in the first essay, this was a comment I got from my professor when he sent us back our essays once they were graded, and even though I tried to do this on my first draft of this essay, I know that, after taking the advice of my peers, I can do this even more so. I feel like since I spent more time on my first draft, I was able to make it more organized and flow together. This is something that I feel is important because it makes the essay easier to revise. I did not take as much time on my first draft of the happiness essay, which made it harder to fix.