First Essay Peer Review
Second Essay Peer Review
When it comes to peer review, I feel like I was able to showcase my best examples on Korin’s essay. On this essay, I was able to talk first about ideas that can be revised or could be adding in. Other thing I mentioned what about to introduction paragraph and how since it felt rushed, how she could add in ideas about the authors and how they are important to what she is trying to get across. The next thing I focused on was her talking about her evidence. She was able to use quotations that fit well into her paragraphs but most of my comments retained to how she could compare her ideas to different texts. Most of the paragraphs would start out towards the beginning with a quote and then there was a lot of explanation. I added in comments throughout her explanation of how she could reference other authors to make the explanation stronger. This way, he ideas connected to two authors, rather than one, making it stronger. The last thing I want to point out in reference to my edits is how I made comments of how she could tie ideas back to her thesis and how her thesis could be revised. Some of the ideas expressed in her essays did not line up with what she talked about in her thesis. One idea mentioned was how relationships were effected by technology, but her thesis was about laziness and work ethic. I wrote comments, such as tie relationships to laziness and work ethic, or a said change the thesis around to say how technology effects the effort people put into certain matters. I feel like my peer review for this essay was much stronger than my last peer review session, and I am only going to grow further.
Third Essay Peer Review
My best comment on a post was for Maria’s rough draft. There was one section where she talked about adolescence and how they do not have the same responsibilities as adults do. I thought that if she added a quote to back up her claim, this would strengthen her paragraph. This is an ideas/evidence comment, since this has to do with adding a quote and setting it up correctly. Without doing this, she does not show the full range of how children differ from emerging adults and adults in terms of conversation.
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