As we move on to writing more essays, the one aspect that I want to work on when it comes to peer review is how to give people examples of how to improve. From the workshops we did, I thought that I was better when working on the the local review rather than the global review. On the local review, I was able to point out sentences and talk about specific sentences that can be re-written. However, when it came to global review, when I had to talk about specific sections that could be moved around and what could be added, I had trouble coming up with ways that each essay could do my suggestions. I would always write what they did that seemed off or too long or short, but I would never say that because it needed revision, how they could do it. If I can start doing this, I feel that it will be more beneficial to my peers and their writing will be enhanced. One way I can do this is to think more critically about their writing and make sure I understand what I am suggesting. This way I will know how to come up with the examples. Plus, I can pull information from my own writing and incorporate it into my classmates pieces.

In this, you can see that I made a revision, but I did not write an example of how they can make it sound better.